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I need to add more detail to my blog in regards to things such as lighting, sound, and general aesthetics, and also link together my blog posts more clearly, and also make it clear which person in my group was responsible for each part of our film opening.

Additional scenes (rough idea)

We need to extend the opening. We are going to show a few establishing shots with a monologue explaining what has happened and why. After the monologue comes an action scene, whereafter the monologue begins again and introduces a flashback where 'Leaf' is being tested on by scientists for her powers. Elliot then finds this out and breaks her out of the Lab, where the flashback ends. 

Character details and backstories

Elliot Grainger

Born: 2995
Age: 18
Born a year after the apocalypse into a society of some the last remaning humans which came to be known as 'the oppressors', he broke away at the age of seventeen to join the army of mutants known as 'the rebellion' as he disagreed with the violant manner that the oppresors were treating them, and the fact that the mutants were captured and tested on for research purposes. He possesses superhuman intelligence which more than makes up for his lack of physical strength and makes him a valuable asset to the mutants.
After escaping the opressor's laboratory with 'Leaf', a captured mutant he took pity on, they found a small group of mutants which they decided to join. The mutants were initially sceptical and suspicious of him as he was a human, but he was eventually accepted into the group where he began his training and aid in the rebellion, being used to create new machinery and weapons to surpass the oppressors and using his knowledge of their technology to find their weaknesses.



Alias- 'Leaf'
Actual name- Unknown
Born-2995 Age-18

Very little is known about this mysterious character other than the fact she is a mutant capable of telekenetic powers; even her real name is a mystery as she simply goes by the alias 'Leaf', so named because she is one of the few mutants who have ever seen them due to the apocalyptic environment destroying most of the nature on the planet.

Born a natural mutant as opposed to those who were once human and changed by the radiation effects of the apocalypse, she began training in the rebellion army at the age of five. During her training her telekinetic powers revealed themselves which makes her a valuable asset within the rebellion, who train her to focus her powers into the destruction of the oppressors. She is an orphan as her mother died in childbirth and her father was captured, tested on, and eventually killed by the oppressors.

She was once captured by the oppressors at the age of seventeen, where Elliot, who was working as a trainee surgeon at the time, saw for the first time the inhumane way they were experimenting on the mutants and set her free, escaping with her. They became close friends after joining the small rebellion army they fight for, and they often work together on covert missions.

First animatic storyboard

The first animatic storyboard showing the initial ideas for camera angles, length of camera shots and a rough idea of what happens in the first scene aesthetically.

Camera angles/shots

Shot Number	Description and Duration	Sound/Dialogue
1	Establishing shots of the front of a warehouse that slowly pan out until the full front of the warehouse is shown. Close-up shots that pan and zoom out into a long shot. 20 seconds.	Non-diegetic soundtrack (music - subtle, eerie music that becomes heavier and more rock-oriented as the scene progresses)Voiceover/monologue explaining the setting and situation. (Cut)
2	Panning shot across soldiers legs as they run from right to left. 3 seconds	Diegetic sound of the soldiers footsteps and their clothing. Non-diegetic soundtrack continued. (Cut)
3	Shot of soldiers running toward the warehouse. Soldiers are wearing black gas/surgical type masks. Soldiers wearing heavy black clothing carrying guns of some kind. 4 seconds.	Diegetic sound of feet running on pavement. Non-diegetic soundtrack continues. (Cut)
4	Long shot of the inside of the door closed which then pans out quickly as the door is smashed open by the soldiers; which then run in to the room toward the camera. 4 seconds	Non-diegetic soundtrack stops to add suspense. Diegetic sound of the door bursting open loudly. (Cut)
5	Long shot of the inside of the room aimed at the door. POV from behind boxes showing the viewer that someone is watching. The soldiers run into the large space in organised soldier form. 8 seconds	Diegetic sound of footsteps and organised orders. Diegetic sound of light breathing. (Cut)
6	Close up shot of the soldiers black booted feet with a small rustic grenade being rolled toward them from behind the camera. 4/5 seconds.	Diegetic rolling sound. (Cut)
7	Over the shoulder shot of the soldier aiming at the smoke bomb which is excreting the smoke. 3 seconds.	Non-diegetic music continued from beginning of scene. Diegetic sound of smoke escaping from the bomb. Soldier exclaiming “It’s a smoke bomb, get out” etc… (Cut)
8	Long shot of the boxes/objects which the main protagonists emerge from/behind and run toward the camera (5 seconds)	Non-diegetic soundtrack (music becomes slightly more epic, heavier). Diegetic sound of boxes falling (Cut)
9	Over the shoulder shot from the soldier looking at the two main characters running from right to left. During this they are being shot at.	Non-diegetic soundtrack Diegetic gunshots Sound of running (fade)

Rough cut

First edit of the rough cut. Shows us which shots are more effectively used in the scene and that to portray the narrative better a few changes to the storyboard and shots are required. The scene was also shot in a different location to the one which was initially planned, so changes to the camera angles and aesthetic surroundings were required to achieve the affect we wanted.

Rough cut with colour balance

Testing the camera angles and shots potentially used in the finished film.